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Guruji,
Aapse prerna lekar humne bhi kuch likhne ki thaani. Aur ye char layine kisi tarah jod daali. Aapki kavitoi ki tarah garahi to nahi. Kunti pahle prayas ke maan se buri bhi nahi :)
Abhi abhi khabar aayi hai ki Bharat ko abu dabhi main mili hai jeet. Humne socha kyon nahi isi par bana daale apna pahla geet.
To aarj kiya hai:
"Hisaab Barabar"
Phir honge do do haath Phir chalenge ghuse aur laat Phir bhidegi hamari aur aapki toli Par dosto ab to hum chalenge ghar Kyonki aaj to hua HISAAB BARABAR
"Kunti pahle prayas ke maan se buri bhi nahi" Heh. I interpreted this as: Kunti wasn't a bad mother the first time. heh. But then I realized it's: kintu pahle prayas ke maan se buri bhi nahin.
arre, tune mujhe guruji kyun bana dala, main is layak nahin. phir bhi, poocha hai toh kahta hoon, meri buddhi anusaar, pahla prayas accha hai, likhte rah :)
"abhi abhi khabar aayi hai..". I liked them. They remind of the kavi-sammelans DD-1 used to telecast.
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Guruji,
Aapse prerna lekar humne bhi kuch likhne ki thaani.
Aur ye char layine kisi tarah jod daali.
Aapki kavitoi ki tarah garahi to nahi.
Kunti pahle prayas ke maan se buri bhi nahi :)
Abhi abhi khabar aayi hai ki Bharat ko abu dabhi main mili hai jeet.
Humne socha kyon nahi isi par bana daale apna pahla geet.
To aarj kiya hai:
"Hisaab Barabar"
Phir honge do do haath
Phir chalenge ghuse aur laat
Phir bhidegi hamari aur aapki toli
Par dosto ab to hum chalenge ghar
Kyonki aaj to hua HISAAB BARABAR
Apne vichar humhe jaroor bhejiyega guruji
Ritesh
correction: teesri line hona chahiye:
Aapki kavitoi ki tarah gahari to nahi
"Kunti pahle prayas ke maan se buri bhi nahi" Heh. I interpreted this as: Kunti wasn't a bad mother the first time. heh. But then I realized it's: kintu pahle prayas ke maan se buri bhi nahin.
arre, tune mujhe guruji kyun bana dala, main is layak nahin. phir bhi, poocha hai toh kahta hoon, meri buddhi anusaar, pahla prayas accha hai, likhte rah :)
"abhi abhi khabar aayi hai..". I liked them. They remind of the kavi-sammelans DD-1 used to telecast.
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